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At this moment someone is crying you name;
they beg for an end to this pain.
Screaming truths in relentless vain,
their struggle remains the same.
They struggle to remain sane,
as evil corrupts their brain,
their happiness has been slain.
The world frowns on them in distain,
shackles them in a bloody chain;
stored tears begin to drain,
the skin begins to stain.

A final tear
a giddy smile.
Turn your head,
don't look at the one you called your child.
Just leave him to look at the flame
you remain silent,
but still they give you all the blame.

In silence you feel the most guilt,
All odds you may have been able to tilt,
the change you had the ability to create,
but never did.
When he called you and there was no answer.
I know you were home all along,
but his crying voice was never any competition for happiness.
The happiness created by his suffering;
giving others the life they always desired,
while taking away the life he had always known.

I feel sorry for you,
all of their problems placed on your shoulders.
All problems created and solved by a whim,
but for every problem created another is solved.
Him.
You never thought solving other's problems would do this;
cause him so much harm.
You never thought that silence when he would call,
would end with knocking,
his knocking on your door.
©2003-2009 ~airmega23
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In the past it has felt as if I have been abandoned by some greater force. That someone had placed the values of others above mine. Just read it.
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I'm really likin the first stanza ... nice work with the rhyming there!

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Wow. i get good images from this, but they don't really make any sence. I see what seems like neglect, then a funeral, heavy sulk-drinking and a flashback, realization of wrong-doings, and being haunted by the memory.

i am dumb sometimes though, so it's okay.


random thought: do you know a Nancy Mc'Clain?

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So ugly death wouldn't touch me. :)
well, i saw torture and sadness, neglect and betrayal. im glad your happy now greg. you deserve it.
Julie~

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he's the one who will stop time for you, so you can catch up to your own life.
Thanks for reading my poem! Just to clarify the person the poem was aimed at was God. And all the torture i feel he must go through, watching his children suffer and die.
Maybe i need to work on getting my point across.

No, i dont know a Nancy Mc'Clain, or atleast i dont think so.

†Greg†

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To be negative at all times is to be threatened by ridiculousness and instant discredibility...

-Kurt Cobain [1967-1994]
It doesn't really feel like an omnescient being. It's a good poem though.


okay thanks. you look like that guy she used to maike out with infront of my locker.... stud.

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So ugly death wouldn't touch me. :)
LoL
No, I definantly dont know her, i think I'd rememebr that. lol

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To be positive at all times is to ignore all that is important sacred or valuable...
To be negative at all times is to be threatened by ridiculousness and instant discredibility...

-Kurt Cobain [1967-1994]
i really think you could have done more with the first stanza if the rhyme scheme wasn't so AAAAAAAAAA, and "their struggle remains the same.
They struggle to remain sane," was a bit icky cause of the use of the same word...
....good thoughts nonetheless

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oh, okay then. ;)

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