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All so
By Greg Batt

I had always been a puppet,
Contained and misdirected,
Analyzed and rejected.
I danced on the stage.

I saw you standing in the crowd,
Watching me dance,
Your smile,
Brought me out of my mindless trance.
For the first time I thought,
Why am I doing this?
Dancing for the society,
That only tries to limit me,
Discourage me,
Beat me,
Into the man they want,
Too eventually pursue

The strings that tied me to others,
The knots I untied,
The loves that died,
The tears I cried.
All so I could say that I loved you.
©2003-2009 ~airmega23
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Thinking about my life, and a certain girl, this just came to me...

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:iconfrostbound:
Damn man, that's a great poem. The last stanza really makes it work though... And the last line will make it hit home, that is, if you plan on showing it to this 'specific' girl. Great job. +Fav.

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:iconunoticedheart:
aww... so goreous... so perfect
Julie~

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he's the one who will stop time for you, so you can catch up to your own life.
:iconyungmunch:
Oh my goodness. That's so incredibly beautiful. I agree with ~frostbound, the last stanza does truly make it work.
:icongiran23:
Another nice one. I agree also, the end is very good(like all of it).

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:icondevilishly-cruel:
Great one yet again ;) (Wink) Nice job!
-Amanda (devilishly-cruel)

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:iconbrownshagcarpet:
this is really good... i like it a lot +fav i love the way you put everything
:icongreen-leaf:
*drool....* i like this, make me wonder what the world would be like if we were marionettes, and not the proverbial kind....
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:iconralasterphecy:
Great poem man! You've managed to weave life and love together very well. Yes the end is a powerful statement for someone special. Great job!

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:iconzsein:
loved the last stanza as well. it seemed to me that your love is your life, living for her. well done.

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